i cannot figure out for the life of me how to make a comment stick. i have tried like every option. whateva.
well i want to write a critique b/c i hope that you trust me enough that we can put these things out here without hurt. all the best.
response to below:
the moment of coming is
the moment of coming to.
so much sex gets deposited on couches
themselves sleek and fatty--
clearly the egg-laying apparatus of a house-hold..
all those quarters like roe along the inseams...
there are phrases in here that kill.
there are also phrases that help those phrases but i think that you may not know that the killers are doing fine on their own.
"harrowing truth", for instance, is a helper to the last 2 lines, which are killers.
Quick On-the-Road One-Handed Note: The Rumpus for My Birthday - Learning to write lefty. And to peck at the keys like a poet. The political consequences of the shift. Minutely felt as they are... Many thanks to The Rum...
6 years ago